Everything we were is gone forever, I lie
Curled up blank as paper on my bed
Longing to never see you again.
I remember when I believed you were
Perfection, hung on your every word,
Smiling to myself at your jokes hours later; all
Eclipsed by what you did, forever.
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Comments (11)
This is so well done… but heartbreaking. Hopefully you’ll find someone worthy & again be… ‘ Smiling to myself at your jokes hours later;’
I love this!
Ouch, devastating.
Incredible entry! Love your poem!! 💌
There is beauty in pain! You may have already seen this as you've subscribed to me but here it is ICYMI: https://vocal.media/poets/the-sun-goddess-and-the-moon-goddess
This was so poignant and relatable as well. Loved your Acrostic!
This is so relateable. Great job!
Fabulous - I especially liked the 2nd line - such a description.
Beautiful acrostic poem really enjoyed it a lot
That last line! Great acrostic and challenge entry! Can really feel the heartbreak in this
Well. I am now eclipsed, after just reading your poem of longing for love...I now am here with the totally opposite of such. Ugh.Love. Whatchagonnado. Eclipsed love is the worst.