Are you there now, Jesus?
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Can you hear my voice, its May?
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I’m assuming that you’re listening, I’ve got a lot to say.
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I’ll try to be brief then.
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You’ve a lot of folk to hear?
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I’ll stick to just one thing, and I’ll try to make it clear.
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There’s this girl at school Lord.
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Do you know, or must I tell?
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Is it true you know my heart? Will I go to Hell?
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Am I just a sinner?
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Or is love the path to God?
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If my feelings are alright, I’d appreciate a nod?
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Do I trust my elders?
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I don’t feel that I am bad?
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Jesus, do you hear me? If you’d tell me I’d be glad.
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Still I have no guidance?
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Here kneeling at this altar.
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And kneeling here, confused, alone, my faith begins to falter.
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Will I find no answer?
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Will I hear my thoughts alone?
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My voice just comes back at me, bouncing off this cold hard stone.
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Jesus, what would you do?
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I cannot believe you’d mind?
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I think you’d say love on, take heart, be thankful and be kind?
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Will you tell me nothing?
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Are you even here at all?
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Jesus, God, Jehovah? Can you not hear me call?
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I must guide myself then?
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Go beyond these rigid walls?
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I’m stepping into sunlight, prepared for leaps and falls.
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Now I’ll trust my own heart.
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But what colours light my way?
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Did you send a rainbow, Jesus? Whatever. I’m okay.
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This was stunning Hannah. I feel like I always look for rainbows when I need a positive sign! Good luck in the challenge. It’s a winner in my book.
Heart wrenching and beautiful, Hannah. I like how your words speak directly to Jesus and not the church. I think it highlights how the church doesn’t really follow their own savior’s teachings. Anyway I loved your poem 😊
I need something more specific to believe in God. Rainbows are too subtle. A rainbow with my rain written across it, that would be specific, lol. Loved your poem!
I love this Hannah 😇🥰🙏🏻🤍🌟
This is a stunning out of the box approach to the challenge, Hannah! I felt this powerfully (I’ve prayed like this before). The emotions evoked reminds me of the final scene in Cormac McCarthy’s play The Sunset Limited.
This was stunning and so very relatable, it really touched me. The desperation to hear or feel something, calling Jesus by every name in every which way to reach him, and receiving nothingness in return is something I’m sure a lot of people can relate to. Painful yet powerful as the narrator becomes their leader and guide for the first time. Amazing work, Hannah.
accept my ha'penny. I love the take on this and I think it fits the rules of the challenge perfectly. (assuming that's what you were going for)
Last lines are very well written. Congrats on the entry.