Sandcastle dream
For Poppy's Prompt
The graves of my heart, are dug deep, into the soil of my soul
On a shore far away, from my dark places, where I send postcards
To a better life, dancing on the horizon, of a dream inside my mind
Ocean waves lap grains, of broken sea shells, carried from coral reefs
Tall broad-leaved trees, stand guard, where the beach turns to forest
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In this dream, I sit as a child building a sandcastle, below a sunlit blue
Full of innocence, still believing life is safe, unaware of the earthquakes
Waiting in the days ahead, when storm clouds would bring rain
When sirens would ring, and fires would burn out of control
When a rising sun, would lift cold and lonely, across a blood-colored sky
And beams of moonlight, would fall through wind chimes, in quiet songs
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Outside of the dream, I lay awake in the night, thinking of different ways
To find guilt, to pass sentence, on every good intention that went wrong
In the morning, I will sand the wood of my past smooth, and shape it
Into a boat, to sail across the sea inside my mind, to find the child
On the shore, building a sandcastle in the warmth of long ago days, I lost
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When my boat lands on the shore, and my feet take purchase on the sand
I'll go to the child, waiting for me, I'll let his brown eyes see mine
And watch, as he doesn't understand, the hurt swimming in his reflection
I'll sit with him, while the waves crash in, and the breeze stirs salt air
Together, we'll build his castle of sand, until the last tower is in place
Then I'll stand, and brush away the sand, before I return to the boat
Still not having spoken
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Before I go, I'll look over my shoulder, at the child I'm leaving
Words will finally, slip past my lips, as I push the boat into the wide ocean
The tide will move against the shore, and I will tell this child, I used to be
It will all be alright, it won't always seem that way, but it will
Storms will come, and they will pass, and when they've gone
The sky will clear, but the memory, of the wind blowing
And the rain pouring will stay, even after the sky opens
And your rainbow appears again, the storm will stay with you
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Comments (34)
Hi-i - So touching: I always seem to relate to you. Thank you for your always lovely compliments. When you get a chance I'd like to introduce you to my Brother - "Twins" in Humor - You may relate it - j.in.l.a
"The graves of my heart, are dug deep, into the soil of my soul" "Storms will come, and they will pass, and when they've gone The sky will clear..." A beautiful beginning and an equally beautiful closure.
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Very moving!
Throw it in the trash?!! What, it was wonderful. Congrats on the top story
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This is so so sweet and gorgeously written. I love the premise of the poem but also how masterfully you carried it out. "beams of moonlight, would fall through wind chimes, in quiet songs" That is a lovely line. "In the morning, I will sand the wood of my past smooth, and shape it Into a boat, to sail across the sea inside my mind, to find the child On the shore, building a sandcastle in the warmth of long ago days, I lost" This might be my favourite part. The language used is so lovely. But the scenario that plays out after it is also amazing and so bittersweet. A beautiful beautiful poem!
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I felt your feelings, great free verse
Thumbs up for your effort! Keep the outstanding workβcongrats!
If any poem could make me cry, this one did. This is beautiful, a real tear-jerker and I have no words left to describe it.
This is truly gorgeous. I love the last line -- "Your rainbow appears again, the storm will stay with you." Very powerful.
Will this was so beautiful! I love the imagery and nostalgic sort of feel to it!! Very well thought out and written!! Great work and congrats on Top Story!
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Great work! And congrats on top story!
first, congratulations on your TS. now, this is excellent. looking back and forward at the same time.
Yay. Congrats on the TS.
Excellent!
Such beautiiful imagary and loved the gentlness of this one, kind of bitter sweet nosalgia x Really lovely π€