Every now and then I fall apart. Oh moon,
comfort me how you comfort the mourners.
Let me bury my burning face
in the darkness of your shoulder. Oh moon,
please don't let them
see their constant go to pieces. Don't let them see how
every now and then I fall apart. Oh, moon.
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Ava Mack
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About Writing
Most people talk about things that bother them as a way to vent their emotions, another way is through writing. As I sit writing in my car, I ponder how much writing, in itself, has helped me become the person I am today. I have endless amounts of pages filled with poems, stories, and sometimes random blurbs. Writing is a window into your soul. The simple action of writing has benefited me; by helping me to achieve a better memory, helping me to learn and grow intellectually, and helping me to communicate my emotions.
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Comments (6)
Love how you’ve gone for the eclipse concept, and personified the sun Ava! “ Let me bury my burning face in the darkness of your shoulder.” is a great piece of imagery🤗
Really, really wonderfully composed piece, and so meaningful!
Beautiful entry. Well done.
Oh, Ava. See what I did there? This was stunning. I like that you went "there" with the opening line. Well done on a great entry.
Beautiful take on the eclipse!✅
On point for today!!!! Love it! So sweet and universal!!🙌🙌