Safe in the car at last
I peel off one heel then the next
the kiss/hug/bye play put to rest
Take care, home safe now's over with
I pull up my hair
and you know it's time to
cast off your mask, I'll cast off mine
slip into your seat, sink deep, and sigh
look at me
with that tell tale grin
that hook in your eye
and urge me on,
say, You go!
Out with the news we took care to save
in our very own hand
made play by play
list of who said what and
They said what?!
we talk and buzz, roar and rave,
Oh my god, yes! Oh my god, no!
on and on we go
all the way home
you know,
time does slip by
mile by mile
with you
About the Creator
Ava Mack
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His Haibun
He does not like poetry; I write it anyway and do not tell him. It's true his face is not a poet's face. It is round and open, youthful; too apt to be compared to the sun. His nose is neat. It is impossible to imagine him smoking a cigarette, terse, full of cheekbones and tension. His warmth burns my fingertips. I am here for his fascinating body, the haphazard freckles I touch one by one; he is here for my eyes, just my eyes. A sunbeam sneaks through the curtains and pierces us both, sizzling the spices of his skin. I inhale and wrap myself in him. He kisses my eyes.
By TheSpinstress3 days ago in Poets
Comments (37)
Beautiful Congratulations !
Congrats on top story and Runner up in the challenge. This was magnificent ❤️
This time is so special between couples 💖 Congrats on placing in the challenge!
So glad this placed!! ❤️❤️❤️
Lovely!!! Congratulations on runner-up!!!
I thought this one deserved a placement all along! So glad to see you get recognition.
Congrats on a well deserved placement on the winners list! This is my favorite poem the judges chose. I love that it tells a story.
Knew this would get recognized!! Congratulations, Ava ❤️❤️❤️
well done sister you made excellent lovely work , I love it
Nicely done, Ava. Not easy writing well with restrictions. Good stuff. 🌹
Love it 😍
You did this so well that I could not help but smile, as your words brought back sweet memories of times forgotten. Thank you for that. Congrats on a well deserved Top Story.
Congratulations on your Top story💖🎉📝
The alliteration in line 8 makes me happy. ☺️ Love it!
Excellent insights and beautifully written. I love your reference to donning and doffing our masks. Well done on a much deserved top story, Ava 💕😊
This is great 💓
Oooh, kinky! Sorry, I may have misread the 'oh my god' parts... Anyway, great Top Story with a lot of truth in it!
Love the idea about taking off our masks when we are with the one we love. Wonderful. ❤
Annnnnnnd completely forgot to say Congrats for Top Story!
Thought I had already commented. Love this so much; it puts the spotlight on those most intimate, quiet moments between the bigger events.
Ah, the comfort and the safety and the intimacy of just being together. What a special tribute, a great glimpse into the love that happens between the events. So well done!!
Exactly! Exactly! Love the line, "that hook in your eye"-- hooked me!
wow ... thats some story! Read mine as well. https://vocal.media/fiction/an-irrevocable-dream-about-a-mermaid
Fabulous!!! Absolutely fabulous!!!♥️♥️💕
Oh, this is so adorable! You've captured a very touching/relatable moment for many, and I believe both platonic and romantic lovers can relate. Nicely done :)