Delight
in the magic
of the bright, starry night;
musical hooves beat the Earth quick
I squeal
~~~
I squeal
with the sound;
my beating heart you steal
with hoofbeats on the moonlit ground
hallowed
~~~
hallowed
is this feeling;
passion’s pure light exposed;
in your shadow, I am reeling
fearless
~~~
fearless
regard, approach
and shake your flowing locks
as you dance close enough to touch
softly
~~~
softly
your coat brushes
my hand as you stride by;
continue on your peaceful quest -
freedom!
~~~
Practicing a different poetic style, brought to my attention by fellow Vocal creator – Mike Singleton. Here’s his poem, including links to this poetic form: Crown Cinquain.
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KJ Aartila
A writer of words in northern WI with a small family and a large menagerie.
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Comments (9)
Beautiful.
reading like magical.
I lived with the poem and felt its words, it's a beautiful poem
Magical!
Beautifully written poem!
This was wonderful! I thought your transitions were very smooth and polished. Great work!
Lovely words for your equine friend and thank you so much for your shout out.
Wow ! Great work. I invite you to read my stories :)
beautiful