Twilight, in deep blue
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he didn't come home last night, twilight
Lost stars die in milky moonlight
Ripping my heart to throw out,
Tongue-lashing, a lost beat
Losing you means sweet
Night caves in, split
Like our hearts
Deep blue,
Broke.
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Melissa Ingoldsby
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Comments (8)
An excellent nonet. I appreciate the imagery here. ❤️
Another excellent nonet! Well-wrought! Some of us do hold deep blue seas in our hearts, me thinks, and the cracks are down so deep only we and the creatures of the deep know the full extent of the pain. "One must be a sea, to receive a polluted stream without becoming impure." -Friedrich Nietzsche
So sad, but the last few words especially are strikingly beautiful and intense. Good luck with the challenge.
Oooo, this gave me strong vibes of Taylor Swift and it seemed very lyrical! You nailed this challenge Merly!
Wonderfully written Melissa!
Some sorrow in this but beautiful
This is sad, and so well done.
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