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With hot, steaming breaths
you whispered, "love's forever."
Then, I felt the knife.
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Cathy holmes
Canadian family girl with a recently discovered love for writing. Other loves include animals and sports.
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Comments (14)
Wow that was unexpected 😨
I'm learning to admire senryu here.
Ooooo!! So many twists in so few words, this felt sultry, dirty and then left me blow away!! Great work Cathy!!
Sensuous and terrifying, Cathy! First the lie and then the betrayal. Loved it!
You did the dang thing Cathy! This was phenomenal!
OH. I love how this is a short senryu to capture the brief, life-altering moment. Or is it....fetish? 🫣😅 This has the feels!
The knife is always present in every relationship. The only difference being on when it's used and by who. Loved your Senryu!
This felt so real I could almost feel the blade. Great writing.
OMG! Your Senryu might be twisted but captured raw truth!
I really wanted to write a Senryu but didn't try yet. Liked this Cathy.
arrggghh those fiendish lovers.
The bitterness of betrayal captured so succinctly! Well done, Cathy!
Fuck that hurts
What a great twist! I love how you used a short poem to tell a whole story.