Love Eclipse
Every star, hidden behind the light of the sun, burns in secret for you
Circles of flame, trace around my dark spaces, in outlines of your moon
Love is a cup you fill, each time you turn my day to night, my tears to rain
I’m on Fire, burning with reflections, of your Raven’s kiss, eclipsing my lips
Passing shadow, celestial body, I need you more, every time we cross paths
Slow burn melting, two auras touching, bright into dark, lust into desire
Entice me, before you leave, bleed me dry, with your ghost, until you return
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Comments (18)
The simultaneous conjuring of the emotional and the visual here is excellent.
Beautiful
Congrats on Top Story!🥳🥳🥳
Incredibly well written and evocative, Will!
Great lines, they all flow so nicely.
The last line is so good, it hits you hard and stoked a fire inside that’s haunting
Phenomenal work! Elegantly passionate!
Oooo! This was sultry and beautifully written Will!! I love it!! Great work and congrats on Top Story!!
Back to say congratulations on your Top Story! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊
So stunningly beautiful!
This is so elegantly beautiful, Will! Wonderful, wonderful work! ☺️
Oooooh, yes!! I love this approach! This is a very sensual poem without being outwardly on the nose and it works so well!! I have to hold up this line though, as it was my favorite!! "I’m on Fire, burning with reflections, of your Raven’s kiss, eclipsing my lips" Ahhh, so good!!
so sensual!!
Oooo, this was so hauntingly beautiful! You nailed this challenge! Loved your Acrostic!
Wow. This is gorgeous writing. Well done, Will.
‘Love is a cup you fill, each time you turn my date to night , my tears to rain.’ That one got me good, Great work, Will!
Oh, you brought the heat with this one! And the emotions. Beautifully written as well, loved it!!
Ummm. I need a cold shower. Wow