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Experimental, Stream of Conscience Poem.

By Paul StewartPublished about a month ago 2 min read
Studio floor used by Jackson Pollock at the Pollock-Krasner House and Study Center in Springs, New York. - By Rhododendrites - Own work, CC BY-SA 4.0, https://commons.wikimedia.org/w/index.php?curid=44204609

right to left, back again, from left to right

when I close my eyes, I see dead

patterns and codes, disrupted

redfi(eye)ne

sideways, glance, a chance to catch them in acts

reali(eye)gn

of betrayal, and manipulative, duplicitous

eroded. I take them and smash

them into each other, because

reco(oar)urse

the eyes, guides, sideways glance, entry point

reso(oar)urce

to the depth of their mind, soul, their very being

my brother, my sister

reddening

trust is earned, like crust of bread, a heart

chaos became the replacement

reckoning

given freely in return for a heart taken freely

for order, because

raping

serpent's liar, serpent's lair, bespoke deceit

my brother, my mother

revelling

those closest, most voracious, evisceration, the

chaos became the requirement

recl(shame)aim

acts

for order, because

refr(defame)ame

neighbours never suspected, in lines of newspapers

my mother, my father

restr(stain)ain

corrupted mind, conscience, absconded care, guilt

when I open my eyes, I see dead

reg(pain)ain

waiting for the fall, biding their time, watching, wary

codes and (greatest pretenders)patterns, interrupted

reconstruct

profile, sideway gaze, the giveaway, contempt pours

corroded. draw them to me, s h a t t e r

them against a wall, because

reinforce

forth

reduce

the fantasist, drawing parallels with the greatest deceivers

my father, my life

redux

tricks of well-honed trade, served unapologetically

chaos became the mis?realignment

forcing a wedge between reality and fallacy, ideally

of disordered order, because

drawing parallels between the serpent and the fall

of man

better to burn bright, than

not at all.

*

Thanks for reading!

Author's Notes: Experimental. A Stream of Conscience , spliced, not really a cleave poem, but close - basically, I haven't found a good enough word or term to describe taking a few poems and smashing them together artfully. There you go. Also struggled with a title for this one. That's no surprise. But, feel...that is the closest to a proper title without taking the easy route out and calling it Untitled 450404 or something redundant. It also features words from Poppy's latest Prompts thingo -

A more detailed description of the image I chose to go with this poem:

Studio floor used by Jackson Pollock at the Pollock-Krasner House and Study Center in Springs, New York. The studio is in an old barn behind the house. Pollock had the building moved, put a wood floor down and used it as his primary painting surface from 1946 until his death in 1956. When he renovated in 1953, he put down a masonite covering. Krasner started to use the room in 1957. Upon her death in 1984, ownership was transferred to Stony Brook University, who removed the covering, discovered the old surface, and had it restored in 1987-8.

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About the Creator

Paul Stewart

Scottish-Italian poet/writer from Glasgow.

Overflowing in English language torture and word abuse.

"Every man has a sane spot somewhere" R.L Stevenson

The Accidental Poet - Poetry Collection is now available!

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  • Gina C.about a month ago

    This was such an emotional and abstractly-creative journey ❤️ I particularly loved the isolation of the words within the words and giving a nod to them. I enjoyed the sense of inner conflict, tied together with the touch of light at the end. Awesome work :)

  • Gabriel Huizengaabout a month ago

    Love the abstraction of words- not unlike Pollock translates into language, I think!! A really raw and striking piece you have here, Paul! Well done :)

  • Grz Colmabout a month ago

    Yo, I read it again without THOSE words that give me stress induced dyslexia! 🤪I think I have a bit of that anyhow, but I digress, this is DARK subject matter..how do you go to these places? Or does it just come forth? I’d ask about the parallels or what it is a reflection of but it might be personal.. plus as I say a bit of mystery is always good. 😊👏 Besides some of the opening and closing lines..I’m surprised this was initially multiple poems.

  • Poppy about a month ago

    You. Are. So. Talented. I particularly adored that ending.

  • Mark Grahamabout a month ago

    What a way to describe one's life or life in general.

  • D. J. Reddallabout a month ago

    A courageous experiment unfolds herein. I expect "Bespoke Deceit" to appear on a local storefront shortly.

  • Gerard DiLeoabout a month ago

    So busy. Liked it, but I need to re-read it a(gain).

  • Kendall Defoe about a month ago

    Interesting take on the challenge...and I think I understand why this image spoke to you!

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