Balloon and the Moon
The journey that ended too soon...
A boy with a bright red balloon,
said, "I'm going to fly to the moon!"
As the altitude heightened,
the air pressure tightened...
and BOOM went the bright red balloon!
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>That was a bad idea. I thought you knew… >Oh, the pathos! I don’t really know you as well as I should. In fact, I may not know the real you at all. That essential, sparkling you that you only reveal to a select few. Had I been paying more attention to the stories you are so fond of telling, in which you are invariably author, narrator and protagonist, I would not have been so foolish as to set you up on a blind date. After all, no friend has ever done anything of the kind for another. That’s preposterous. What is a friend, really?
By D. J. Reddall7 days ago in Fiction
Comments (15)
This is a beautifully written and evocative piece of writing
Sweet poem! I could hear this being added to a child' s night time story. Well done ❤️
Poor fella. Bad judgement.
Lol, I hope he died! Sorry for my dark sense of humour 😅 Loved your limerick!
hahaha, great one
This is a cute and fun little poem that captures the excitement and disappointment of a child's imagination.💗💗💗
Freaking adorable 🥰 I love it
😱❤️💯👍Good one❗
Oh!! This is so cute and such wonderful flow!! BOOM!! Nailed it, Holly!! 😍😍😍
Haha! Super clever and really cute 😁😁. Love it!
Thats a great one! I subscribed to your work too :)
Fun one! Awesome 👏
nice one holly love it😀
Great rhythm! That’s a true limerick! Nice work.
Fabulous!!! Loving it!!!